Drafts

FIRST DRAFT

'I really like the opening long shot, as it really emphasizes the opening guitar riff and looks really professional'

'I like how you've developed the prop shots from the storyboard through editing and extra footage'

'I like the change in colour towards the end as it adds more variation to the performance shots and just adds to the whole finally effect'

'the anonymity of the lead singer with the thing on his head is interesting, I like how it also exaggerates some of the singers movement. I also like the connection i lantern at the end'

'I like the subtle comedic aspects to the video as it makes it rewatch able and builds a likeable persona to the band'

' I think the variation in lighting and props are really pretty, sometimes the second guitar player seems sort of out of place, so I would cut the amount of footage he's playing. '

' I think the shots with the smashing thing bring down the overall quality of the video so I would re-shoot those. I like the performance shots of the lead singer but sometimes the drumming seems out of time. I also really like the costumes.' 

SECOND DRAFT

'I think adding different and more shots has made the video much more interesting and dynamic, as some of the long shots- particularly with the second guitarist were a bit lacking.'

'I like the inserts of the footage from your teaser video, and I like the change in colour to diversify the video'

'I like the new footage of the guy falling of the shed thing, as its just funny and reminiscent of the mick-taking attitude most rock bands have.'

'I like that you've taken some more interesting angles of the musicians'

'I think where you've used repetition has worked well but  love all the reversal footage and sped up shots.'

'I really like the way you took the globe and turned it into a pinata'